Topic: The internet has transformed the way information is chared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest? Answer: Today, the internet brings human communicating immediately fasting than ever before. It’s not only very convenients for us but also took up many others problems in same time. First of all, the most problems on the internet are all the articles, news and informations, we really don’t know it’s true or not. Secondly, there also had huge financial scam group made personal bankcurpt and families thus broken. In social media platform, even the one of biggest company Facebook also still had the most volumes of scam events happened evreydays. However, the faking news still in the internet content everywhere. Remember I was the lecture teached in university several years ago, I still hard to judged the students’ assignments is original writing form themselves or not. But in academical, there had the app who can scan the full paper than it will indicating show how many % same parts with the other’s writer in your thesis. Each school or teacher’s same part standard limited required were difference. But, even just Facebook’s spent a lots of money setting the security guard system to saved their memebers, still can’t 100% reducing the internet scammed. My solution is all the internet companies must inventing tools to verifying fake and scam rather than asking ourselves don’t casual personal ID information upload to internet and don’t waste too much time and have a good disciplane go on the internet. In conclusion, getting the AI technology fasting comes up, we can’t escape and negitive to avoid the internet problems. We should have “be careful” when we driving the car when we on online. please help me check how to writing task 2 goal band 7 thanks
ChatGPT 說：
I’ll go step by step: first tell you rough band level, then give you a Band-7 style model essay, then show you how to upgrade your own writing.
1. Rough band estimate & main problems
If this essay were in the real exam, it would probably be around:
Overall: Band 5–5.5
Very briefly:
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Task Response:
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You do mention problems (fake news, scams, plagiarism) and some solutions.
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But ideas are not fully explained and not clearly separated → this pulls you down.
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Coherence & Cohesion:
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Introduction is too short and unclear.
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Paragraph 2 mixes many ideas; topic sentences are not strong.
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Conclusion is confusing and doesn’t repeat main ideas clearly.
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Lexical Resource (Vocabulary):
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Good attempts: financial scam group, security system, fake news, academic…
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But many wrong forms/spellings: bankcurpt, scammed, negitive, disciplane, teached, fasting (should be bankrupt, scams, negative, discipline, taught, fast).
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Grammar Range & Accuracy:
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This is the biggest problem now.
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Many sentences are unclear or broken:
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“Today, the internet brings human communicating immediately fasting than ever before.”
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“My solution is all the internet companies must inventing tools to verifying fake and scam…”
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Good news:
Your ideas are OK. If we fix structure + grammar + more precise vocabulary, you can move toward Band 6–7.
2. Band-7 style model essay (same topic)
Use this as your reference version.
Topic
The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?
Band-7 model (about 280 words)
The internet has revolutionised how people access information and communicate with one another. However, this development has also created several serious problems, especially in relation to online safety and the reliability of information.
One major issue is the spread of misinformation. Because anyone can publish content online, false news and misleading opinions can be shared millions of times within a few hours. This can influence elections, damage reputations and even put people’s health at risk, as we saw when inaccurate medical advice spread widely during the Covid-19 pandemic. Another serious problem is online fraud. Criminal groups use fake websites, social media adverts and phishing emails to steal people’s personal data and savings. Many victims are elderly or less educated internet users who do not know how to recognise these scams.
Several measures could be taken to address these problems. First, governments should introduce stricter regulations requiring social media platforms and search engines to remove clearly false or harmful content more quickly, and to verify the identity of advertisers. Heavy fines could encourage companies to invest more in monitoring systems and human moderators. Second, schools and universities need to provide digital literacy education so that young people learn how to check sources, protect their personal information and report suspicious behaviour online. Finally, individuals also have a responsibility to think critically, avoid sharing unverified information, and use security tools such as two-step verification.
In conclusion, although the internet has brought enormous advantages, it has also created serious challenges related to misinformation and online fraud. By combining stronger regulation, better education and more responsible user behaviour, these risks can be significantly reduced.
You can copy this structure in the exam (not sentences, but logic):
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Intro: paraphrase question + say what problems you will discuss.
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Body 1: Problem 1 + explanation + example; Problem 2 + explanation + example.
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Body 2: 2–3 clear solutions → who should do what (government / companies / schools / individuals).
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Conclusion: summary of problems + summary of solutions.
3. How to upgrade your essay (before/after sample)
Let’s take your first paragraph:
Today, the internet brings human communicating immediately fasting than ever before. It’s not only very convenients for us but also took up many others problems in same time.
Improved Band-7 style:
Today, the internet allows people to communicate and access information more quickly than ever before. However, while it is extremely convenient, it has also created several serious problems that did not exist in the past.
Key changes:
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“brings human communicating immediately fasting” → “allows people to communicate… more quickly”
✅ Correct grammar
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“very convenients” → “extremely convenient”
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Convenient (adj), not convenients.
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“took up many others problems in same time” → “has also created several serious problems that did not exist in the past”
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Use present perfect (has created) for ongoing situation.
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Add “serious” and “did not exist in the past” to show you answer the question exactly.
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4. Concrete strategy for you to reach Band 7 in Task 2
(1) Use a fixed 4-paragraph template
For problem–solution questions:
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Introduction
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1 sentence: general statement
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1 sentence: answer both parts of the question
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Body 1 – Problems
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Topic sentence: “One major problem is…”
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Explain → Example
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Second problem → Explain → Example
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Body 2 – Solutions
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Topic sentence: “Several measures could be taken…”
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Solution 1 (government/companies) → Explain
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Solution 2 (schools/individuals) → Explain
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Conclusion
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Summarise main problems + main solutions
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Make a final comment (e.g. “Although…, with…, these problems can be reduced.”)
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(2) Control your grammar
You don’t need super complex grammar for Band 7, but you must avoid basic errors.
Focus on these 5 rules:
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S + V + O basic sentences
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Wrong: Today, the internet brings human communicating immediately fasting.
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Correct: Today, the internet allows people to communicate immediately.
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Verb tenses
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Use present simple for general truths:
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The internet is very convenient.
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Use present perfect for changes from past to now:
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The internet has created new types of crime.
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Uncountable nouns
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information ❌ informations
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news ❌ newses / newes
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advice ❌ advices
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Word form
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scam (n), scammers (n pl), to scam (v)
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bankrupt (adj & v), bankruptcy (n)
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academic (adj / n), academically (adv)
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discipline (n), disciplined (adj)
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Article use
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on the internet
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in the past
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on social media platforms (no “the” before “social media” in general)
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(3) Use safer, clearer vocabulary (no need to be too “fancy”)
You already have good ideas. Just use clear expressions:
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Problems
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spread of misinformation / fake news
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online fraud / financial scams
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identity theft
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cyberbullying
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internet addiction / wasting time
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Solutions
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introduce stricter regulations
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require companies to verify advertisers
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remove harmful content
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provide digital literacy courses
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teach critical thinking skills
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educate people to protect personal data
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(4) Practice “Claim – Reason – Example”
For each main idea, follow this mini-structure:
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Claim (what you believe)
One serious problem is the spread of misinformation.
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Reason / Explanation (why / how)
Because anyone can publish content online, false stories can reach millions of people within a very short time.
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Example / Evidence
For example, during the pandemic many people followed unproven medical advice they read on social media, which sometimes put their health at risk.
Do this for each main idea, and your essay will automatically be more “logical” and closer to Band 7.
(5) A small homework suggestion for you
Rewrite your original essay using:
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The same ideas you wrote (fake news, scams, academic plagiarism, company responsibility + user responsibility)
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But follow this 4-paragraph structure and Claim–Reason–Example pattern.
If you like, you can paste your rewritten version next time, and I’ll mark it like a real examiner (with estimated band and corrections).
你說：
ChatGPT 說：
Nice 😊 Then let’s lock in one clear template you can reuse in the exam (especially for problem–solution questions like this).
1. Simple 4-paragraph template (you can almost memorise this)
You can adapt this to many topics.
Paragraph 1 – Introduction
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背景句 (general statement)
The internet has completely changed how people communicate and obtain information.
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改寫題目 + 回答題目
However, it has also created several serious problems. This essay will discuss the main issues related to the internet and suggest some possible solutions.
Paragraph 2 – Problems
Topic sentence：
One major problem of the internet is ________.
Then follow: Reason → Example
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Problem 1: misinformation / fake news
One major problem of the internet is the spread of misinformation and fake news. Because anyone can post anything online, false information can be shared very quickly. For example, many people believed untrue health advice during the Covid-19 pandemic, which sometimes put their lives at risk.
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Problem 2: online scams / fraud
Another serious issue is online fraud. Criminal groups create fake websites and social media advertisements to steal users’ personal information and money. Many elderly people and less experienced users are easy targets for these scams.
(You can keep your “bankrupt families” idea here.)
Paragraph 3 – Solutions
Topic sentence：
Several measures could be taken to tackle these problems.
Then: Solution → How it works → Who does it
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Solution 1: government + companies
First, governments should introduce stricter laws to punish online scams and require internet companies to remove obviously false or harmful content more quickly. Social media platforms should also verify advertisers and improve their security systems.
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Solution 2: education + individuals
Second, schools and universities can provide digital literacy courses so that students learn how to check information and protect their personal data. At the same time, individuals must take responsibility by avoiding the sharing of unverified news and by using tools such as strong passwords and two-step verification.
Paragraph 4 – Conclusion
1–2 sentences only:
In conclusion, the internet has led to serious problems, especially the spread of fake information and online fraud. Nevertheless, with stronger regulation, better education and more careful behaviour from users, these risks can be greatly reduced.
2. Your next step (very concrete)
Take this template and rewrite your original essay:
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Keep your ideas:
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fake news
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scams & bankrupt families
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difficulty checking students’ original work
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companies & users both have responsibility
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Put them into this structure:
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Intro (2 sentences)
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Problems (2 big problems, each with reason + example)
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Solutions (2–3 solutions, each with “who + do what + why”)
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Conclusion (2 sentences)
If you want, you can write your new version following this template and paste it to me next time—I’ll mark it like an IELTS examiner and show you where you are compared with Band 7.
你說：
ChatGPT 說：
Great 👍 Then I’ll give you two things directly:
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A Band-7 style essay using YOUR ideas
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A correction table with your original sentences → improved version.
You can study + copy the structure for exam use.
1. Band-7 style essay (using your ideas)
Topic
The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?
Approx. 280 words
The internet has made communication and access to information faster and more convenient than ever before. However, this development has also created several serious problems, particularly related to false information and online crime.
One major problem is the spread of misinformation. Because anyone can upload content, it is often difficult to know whether an article or piece of news is true or not. False stories about politics, health or finance can influence people’s decisions and damage trust in society. As a university lecturer in the past, I sometimes found it hard to judge whether students’ assignments were their own work or copied from online sources. This shows how the internet can also encourage plagiarism in academic work.
Another serious issue is online fraud. On social media platforms, including large companies such as Facebook, scam advertisements and fake accounts appear every day. Criminal groups use these tools to trick users into giving away personal information or transferring money, and some victims even become bankrupt, which can destroy whole families.
Several measures could be taken to address these problems. First, governments should work with internet companies to develop more advanced tools for detecting fake news and online scams, and they should punish criminal groups more strictly. Second, schools and universities need to provide digital literacy education so that young people learn how to check sources and protect their personal data. Finally, individual users must also take responsibility by being careful about what they share, avoiding suspicious links and limiting the amount of time they spend online.
In conclusion, although the internet has brought great convenience, it has also created serious problems such as misinformation, plagiarism and online fraud. With stronger regulation, better education and more cautious behaviour from users, these risks can be greatly reduced.
2. Key corrections from your essay
Here are some of your sentences and how to improve them:
| Your sentence | Corrected Band-7 style |
|---|---|
| Today, the internet brings human communicating immediately fasting than ever before. | Today, the internet allows people to communicate and access information more quickly than ever before. |
| It’s not only very convenients for us but also took up many others problems in same time. | It is not only very convenient, but it has also created several other problems at the same time. |
| First of all, the most problems on the internet are all the articles, news and informations, we really don’t know it’s true or not. | First of all, a major problem on the internet is that we often cannot tell whether online articles and news are true or not. |
| there also had huge financial scam group made personal bankcurpt and families thus broken. | there are also large financial scam groups that make individuals bankrupt and even destroy families. |
| In social media platform, even the one of biggest company Facebook also still had the most volumes of scam events happened evreydays. | On social media platforms, even one of the biggest companies, Facebook, still has a large number of scam incidents happening every day. |
| I still hard to judged the students’ assignments is original writing form themselves or not. | I still found it difficult to judge whether students’ assignments were their own original writing or copied from the internet. |
| there had the app who can scan the full paper than it will indicating show how many % same parts with the other’s writer in your thesis. | there are applications that can scan a full paper and show what percentage is the same as other published work. |
| still can’t 100% reducing the internet scammed. | still cannot reduce internet scams by 100%. |
| all the internet companies must inventing tools to verifying fake and scam | all internet companies should develop tools to identify fake news and online scams |
| we can’t escape and negitive to avoid the internet problems. We should have “be careful” when we driving the car when we on online. | we cannot escape from internet problems, but we should be as careful online as when we are driving a car. |
If you want extra practice, you can now rewrite your essay using:
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This Band-7 model as a reference, and
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The 4-paragraph structure we discussed:
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Intro – paraphrase + mention problems & solutions
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Problems – 2 serious problems, each with explanation + example
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Solutions – 2–3 solutions, clearly linked to each problem
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Conclusion – restate problems + solutions briefly
Whenever you have a new version, paste it here and we’ll polish it again toward Band 7 🔧✍️
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